Muddle through somehow – Friday Fictioneers

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It’s Friday Fictioneers time! The challenge is to write 100 words based on a weekly photo prompt chosen by our host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Check out her blog for more information by clicking here. Thank you to all who take the time to read, like or comment.

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PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Muddle through somehow

Elizabeth looked out of the window and bit her lip. On horseback they might make it to the Jefferson farm before nightfall, but Mama said Old Man Jefferson was a scoundrel. By morning they’d be snowed in.

Billy padded into the room clutching his blanket.

“Mama still won’t wake up.”

“I told you to leave her be.”

“She ain’t woken in days,” he said pouting. “At least she quit coughing.”

Elizabeth blinked too late to catch the tear that rolled down her cheek. Billy held her hand.

“Don’t worry Betty,” he said. “She’ll wake tomorrow, you’ll see. Mama loves Christmas.”

9 responses to “Muddle through somehow – Friday Fictioneers”

  1. wmqcolby Avatar

    Whoa. Knock me OUT! Story great, ending line the celebratory cherry. This ROCKED, Thom!

    Five out of five Jeffersonians.

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  2. neilmacdon Avatar

    Brilliant, Thom. Time slowed down as I read

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  3. rgayer55 Avatar

    I’m with Kent. Outstanding piece. Poor kids.

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  4. Sandra Avatar

    Heartbreaking stuff.

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  5. michael1148humphris Avatar
    michael1148humphris

    Top story, i worry for the children

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  6. gahlearner Avatar
    gahlearner

    This was getting chillier with every word I read, Billy’s innocence making it even more so. Great writing.

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  7. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Thom,

    Beautiful piece of writing. So much story layered between the lines.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. Clare Hempstead Avatar

    This is heart-breaking, but so well written.

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  9. creatingahome Avatar

    A very sad tale.

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