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Threshold – Friday Fictioneers

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It’s Friday Fictioneers time! The challenge is to write 100 words based on a weekly photo prompt chosen by our host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Check out her blog for more information by clicking here. Thank you to all who take the time to read, like or comment.

2016 08 12

PHOTO PROMPT – © Adam Ickes

Threshold

I stopped before the bridge. The last time I crossed its threshold I was warned never to return. Now it stretched before me again, daring me to take the first step towards inevitable judgement and possible damnation.

For nine years I had wandered. The memory of my mother’s eyes, drowning in tears, haunted me whenever I closed my own.

I looked at the note she had pressed into my palm before they pulled her away.

Genesis 28:15

It’s amazing how one word and two numbers can mean so much. I stepped forward, determined to see those eyes smile once more.

11 responses to “Threshold – Friday Fictioneers”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar
    neilmacdon

    Good atmosphere

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks for reading and commenting again Neil. You always seem to be first. Very dedicated of you. I’m about 3 weeks behind reading everybody’s stories! Hopefully I’ll get a chance to catch up soon.

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  2. Laurie Bell Avatar
    Laurie Bell

    Well done. Good tension. And so sad but triumphant too

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks Laurie. I was going for a mixture of both!

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  3. rochellewisoff Avatar
    rochellewisoff

    Dear Thom,

    Nicely done. And the verse (yes, I had to go read it) adds so much to the story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks Rochelle. I thought about adding the verse at the end of the story but decided it would be more fun to see if any readers felt moved enough to look it up themselves. I’m glad you did!

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  4. spicedmullings Avatar
    spicedmullings

    Great writing and using the verse to illustrate it!

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      Thom Carswell

      Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it!

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  5. gahlearner Avatar
    gahlearner

    I would have appreciated the verse spelled out, not everyone wants to read the bible. It’s still an interesting story.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Ah. Sorry you feel that way. I tried to write a story that would work well with or without having to read the Bible passage. I’m an atheist so the idea of choice in this matter was important to me. I gave enough information that a quick internet search would give the reader all they need, or alternatively they could choose to accept the mystery of a mother’s secret message to her son. I hope you didn’t feel compelled to read the Bible if it is something you didn’t want to do.

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      1. gahlearner Avatar
        gahlearner

        No, don’t worry. The story works as is. I’m lazy.

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