Murder – Friday Fictioneers

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Time for another Friday Fictioneers entry. The challenge is to write 100 words based on a weekly photo prompt chosen by our host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Check out her blog for more information by clicking here. Thank you to all who take the time to read, like or comment.

2016 05 06

PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot

Murder

There were more of them today, perched in formation along the telephone wire.

“More! More!” said Asher, as if reading his thoughts.

“You can see them? The orderly said they were in my imagination.”

Asher stared out of the window, rocking on his toes and tapping his hands together rhythmically.

“Can you…hear them too?”

“Caw! Caw!” Asher laughed wildly.

Diggory sighed, that wasn’t what he meant. He rubbed his cloudy left eye, remembering the beak that had pierced it.

The collective name is a murder of crows.

Who had told him that?

Ava.

Eighteen pairs of eyes watched him intently.

 

N.B. This story is linked to one of my previous Friday Fictioneers tales. If you enjoyed Murder please check out The Garden.

16 responses to “Murder – Friday Fictioneers”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar

    Nicely atmospheric

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  2. draliman Avatar

    Pretty creepy! I’m thinking they’e in a mental institution and he’s having a nightmare flashback… or is he? 🙂

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks! They’re definitely in some kind of institution. As for the rest…I really couldn’t say…

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  3. helenmidgley Avatar

    Creepily well done 😉

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you. Glad you liked it!

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  4. wmqcolby Avatar

    Lots of questions for this story’s continuation. Creepily cool.
    Well done, Thom!

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks very much. Hopefully a future prompt will inspire me to write a third excerpt of this story. It’s had an encouraging response so far!

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      1. wmqcolby Avatar

        Go for it!

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  5. Caerlynn Nash Avatar
    Caerlynn Nash

    Sounds like a touch of “One Flew over the Cuckoo’s Nest”. Nicely done.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks Caerlynn. Glad you enjoyed it!

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  6. Sandra Avatar

    I think he should stay away from the window. Nice one.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks Sandra. He could stay away from the window…but I have a feeling the crows would find him!

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  7. Mike Avatar
    Mike

    My strategy, dose bread with Largactil, believe me it works a treat.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Haha. You don’t want to mess with these Crows Mike!

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  8. gahlearner Avatar
    gahlearner

    This is very creepy, especially Asher. Intriguing story.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Asher isn’t too bad. He’s just different. Thanks for commenting. Glad you liked it.

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