Ants – Friday Fictioneers

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Thomas Charles Henry

April 1, 2016

Time for this week’s Friday Fictioneers entry. The challenge is to write a 100-word story or poem based on a weekly photo prompt chosen by our host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Check out her blog for more information by clicking here. Thank you to all who take the time to read, like or comment.

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PHOTO PROMPT © Marie Gail Stratford

Ants

Heart pounding in his chest, he peered over the ledge. This would be the last time he would take in this view. It would all end today. Just one last act of courage.

He watched as the people below scurried about, consumed by the pointless tasks of their pointless lives. No more evolved than the ants in Nana’s old backyard.

Time to boil the kettle Jimmy. They’re outta control again.

He allowed himself the briefest of smiles as he studied his unsuspecting prey, one eye pressed to the scope, finger resting lightly on the trigger. It would all end today.

21 responses to “Ants – Friday Fictioneers”

oldentimes

April 1, 2016

Sure enough, it is going to end!

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1. Thom Carswell
  
  April 1, 2016
  
  It certainly is but I don’t think it will end well!
  
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Edith M. Field

April 1, 2016

Chilling! And very well written.

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1. Thom Carswell
  
  April 1, 2016
  
  Thanks Edith!
  
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Mike

April 1, 2016

A story in miniature, I liked it

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1. Thom Carswell
  
  April 1, 2016
  
  Thanks Mike!
  
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draliman

April 1, 2016

Wow, powerful and pretty chilling. To think he’s up there, the people below little suspecting that in a second their lives could end…
Great stuff!

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1. Thom Carswell
  
  April 2, 2016
  
  It’s a sinister thought isn’t it? Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed it!
  
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Dale

April 1, 2016

Horrid, horrid person! Well done!

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1. Thom Carswell
  
  April 2, 2016
  
  Me or him?! Haha! Glad you enjoyed it!
  
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  1. Dale
    
    April 2, 2016
    
    Him, of course!😁
    
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wildchild47

April 2, 2016

Truly a twisted tale – but well written – just enough tension – and very clever in that it turns out to NOT be about suicide. Well done 🙂

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1. Thom Carswell
  
  April 2, 2016
  
  Thanks! Glad you liked the twist!
  
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Sandra

April 2, 2016

An effective analogy. Nicely done.

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1. Thom Carswell
  
  April 2, 2016
  
  Thanks Sandra
  
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rochellewisoff

April 2, 2016

Dear Thom,

Powerful and well written. Definitely not going to end well, though. Did I say chilling?

Shalom,

Rochelle

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1. Thom Carswell
  
  April 2, 2016
  
  Thanks Rochelle. I’m really enjoying this so far. One week I may even write something uplifting. It’s not really in my nature though! Glad you liked it.
  
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madamewriter

April 5, 2016

Nice wordplay, well done!

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1. Thom Carswell
  
  April 5, 2016
  
  Thank you for reading and commenting!
  
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patriciaruthsusan

April 5, 2016

What a twisted character. And to think, it all started with killing ants. Well written, Thom. — Suzanne

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1. Thom Carswell
  
  April 6, 2016
  
  Thanks Suzanne. Glad you enjoyed it. A couple of days after writing this, a load of ants decided to invade my lounge. I think it was some sort of revenge!
  
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