Indigo

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Indigo

“Please,” Indigo said, exasperated. “Don’t just say ‘blue’. Blue doesn’t exist. Nothing can without context. Blue can be midnight or midday; a dirty joke or profound grief; glacial ice or the flame’s hottest point. The words we choose hold power. They reveal our truth. Observe the scene. Tell me what you see.”

I tried, embarrassed. My words felt clumsy and vulnerable: hundreds of tiny naked beings tumbling from my mouth, into the world. Emancipated. Unretrievable.

When I finished, Indigo’s eyes were wet; their soul clutched in anticipation.

“Now, tell me what you see when you look at me,” they said.

Written in response to Friday Fictioneers, a weekly 100-word writing challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsCome and play along!

I ended up rewriting my story three times this week, never quite feeling as though I had done the narrative, or Sandra’s photo, justice. For those interested, all three versions can be found here: Shades of Indigo.

22 responses to “Indigo”

  1. neilmacdon Avatar

    Well, this worked for me. Well done

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    1. Thomas Charles Henry Avatar

      Thank you!

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  2. Dale Avatar

    This worked extremely well for me. Beautifully done and worth the hard work!

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  3. Iain Kelly Avatar

    Worked for me too, an interesting way to look at the prompt. Well done.

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    1. Thomas Charles Henry Avatar

      Thank you!

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  4. athling2001 Avatar

    Well done!

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    1. Thomas Charles Henry Avatar

      Thank you!

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  5. Tannille Avatar

    I saw ” blue” when I saw the prompt but nothing came story wise. I’m glad you ran with it. I found this week’s prompt challenging.

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    1. Thomas Charles Henry Avatar

      Thank you!

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  6. msjadeli Avatar

    Thomas, I’ve never heard words described quite like this before:

    hundreds of tiny naked beings tumbling from my mouth, into the world. Emancipated. Unretrievable.

    So good, just as the whole story is. Excellent writing!

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    1. Thomas Charles Henry Avatar

      Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it.

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      1. msjadeli Avatar

        You’re very welcome.

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  7. Margaret Avatar

    Wonderful images in this. You’ve expanded the possibilities of ‘blue’, and I just love your description of the words being uttered. Amazing.

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    1. Thomas Charles Henry Avatar

      Thank you, Margaret. Very kind!

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  8. Brenda's Thoughts Avatar

    Words are indeed powerful and when released can free us. Well done!

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    1. Thomas Charles Henry Avatar

      Thank you!

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  9. GHLearner Avatar

    That was beautiful and also important.

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  10. michael1148humphris Avatar
    michael1148humphris

    A story to cherish, nicely done

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    1. Thomas Charles Henry Avatar

      Thank you, Michael.

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  11. Angela Avatar

    This was unique and beautiful written. Very well done!

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  12. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Thomas,

    Words do indeed hold power. A lot of emotion in your hundred words. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thomas Charles Henry Avatar

      Thank you, Rochelle!

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