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(Can I tell you I love you in a) Clichéd Love Song? – Friday Fictioneers

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Time for another Friday Fictioneers entry! The challenge is to write a 100-word story in response to a weekly photo prompt chosen by our host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Follow the link to her blog for more information. Thank you to all who take the time to read, like, or comment.

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PHOTO PROMPT © Ted Strutz

(Can I tell you I love you in a) Clichéd Love Song?

How do you capture the sky?
In blue, grey, pink, or black?
Tonight I’m going to try.

Forgive the rhyme,
I’m nervous.
I thought I’d write a song,
But I can’t make it through this line without asking you to “come along”
Or “make me feel like I belong.”

The universe is infinite.
And you’re so close.
Is it divine retribution
Or cruel joke
That says you’ll never be close to me?

Please
Be close to me.

I don’t ask much.
I just need you such
That I would spend my life alone,
For a moment shared
Alone with you.

12 responses to “(Can I tell you I love you in a) Clichéd Love Song? – Friday Fictioneers”

  1. Alicia Jamtaas Avatar
    Alicia Jamtaas

    I love the last line! And Heck, these too. Forgive the rhyme, I’m nervous. I thought I’d write a song,

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you Alicia. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  2. anuragbakhshi Avatar
    anuragbakhshi

    Absolutely lovely.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you!

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  3. pennygadd51 Avatar
    pennygadd51

    I hope the song-maker finds a more receptive woman to love. His muse here is never going to be as close as he wishes.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks for your comment Penny. His muse may never be as close as he wishes, but at least he has a muse at all. That counts for something I suppose!

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  4. granonine Avatar
    granonine

    I just feel really sorry for this poor guy who is going to spend his whole life dwelling on one moment alone with a woman who doesn’t return his love.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you for your comment. Hopefully love is waiting for him further down the line!

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  5. prior.. Avatar
    prior..

    beautiful, light, and musical
    and so creative
    🙂

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you for your kind comment. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  6. Dawn M. Miller Avatar
    Dawn M. Miller

    This is what the best songs are made of.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks!

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