The Phoenix – Friday Fictioneers

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It’s Friday Fictioneers time! The challenge is to write a 100-word story in response to a weekly photo prompt chosen by our host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Follow the link to her blog for more information. Thank you to all who take the time to read, like, or comment.

This is my first post in a while. I was off trying to write a dissertation. I don’t recommend it.

2017 10 14

PHOTO POMPT © Douglas M. MacIlroy

The Phoenix

“Oh please,” she laughed. “You’re writing a story about a phoenix?”

“It’s a metaphor,” I said. “The phoenix represents my struggle against adversary.”

“Adversary? You mean adversity, moron. And what adversity? All you do is stay in your room playing video games and reading comics.”

She laughed again and her features morphed: her eyes became black voids, her mouth pinched into a sharp beak, her auburn hair caught aflame. I reached out a hand to smother the fire before it consumed me.

“Don’t touch me, freak! Mum!”

“Leave your sister alone.”

“She’s not my sister,” I muttered. “She’s my adversary.”

22 responses to “The Phoenix – Friday Fictioneers”

  1. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist Avatar

    LOL. Cleverly written.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you!

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  2. granonine Avatar

    Nicely done, and a unique take on the prompt.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks for reading!

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  3. Dale Avatar
    Dale

    Well done!

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks Dale!

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  4. pennygadd51 Avatar

    That’s a very ingenious take on the prompt. Probably applies to quite a few teenage brothers and sisters! I like your description of the sister as a phoenix!

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks Penny!

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  5. Varad Avatar

    Yikes! That was good.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks Varad! Glad you enjoyed it.

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  6. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar

    Oh the tender love between siblings…

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Adorable isn’t it? Thanks Björn!

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  7. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover Avatar
    Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    Great dialogue and creative take on the prompt.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you!

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      Thom Carswell

      Thanks for commenting and sharing your link.

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  8. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    A clever piece indeed. Excellent.

    Click to read my FriFic!

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks Keith. Your story made me chuckle! I tried to leave a comment but my credentials couldn’t be verified! Sounds serious!

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  9. Norma Avatar

    Nicely done! Siblings at war.

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      Thom Carswell

      Thanks Norma!

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  10. Alicia Jamtaas Avatar

    I like this very much. Great imagination.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks Alicia! Glad you enjoyed it.

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