Pansies – Friday Fictioneers

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Thank you to everybody who took the time to read, like or comment on my debut Friday Fictioneers story last week. It’s now time for another! The challenge is to write a 100-word story or poem based on a weekly photo prompt chosen by our host Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Check out her blog for more information by clicking here if you want to get involved. I wrote two this week and it was really difficult to choose between them. I am sure the one that lost out will have its day in the sun eventually. You can never have too many stories!

25 03 2016

PHOTO PROMPT – © Ted Strutz

Pansies

“Fucking pansy!” He shouted as his fist connected with my stomach, doubling me over. Hands held me in place as I stared into the porcelain abyss . I heard the chain being pulled then nothing but the roar of rushing water and muffled laughter.

“Better get used to being on your knees in a public toilet you fucking pansy.” He taunted, dumping out the contents of my rucksack.

I got home to find dad engrossed in another one of his repurposing projects.

“I thought we could use this old toilet as a planter.” He said excitedly. “What should we grow?”

“Pansies.”

21 responses to “Pansies – Friday Fictioneers”

  1. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Thomas,

    While the ending was sort of humorous, it made me sad. I also wanted to go kick a bully where it hurt the most. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you Rochelle.

      Because of the word count restriction I wasn’t able to indicate how the central character is feeling when he says the word “pansies” at the end of the story. I am delighted to discover that the ending can be interpreted differently by different readers. I think I might keep my own view on the ending a secret for now!

      Thomas

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  2. Dale Avatar
    Dale

    Oh the poor kid.. still having a sense of tongue-in-cheek humour after his abuse…

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  3. aliciajamtaas Avatar

    This story made me sad – in a good way because it was very well written and got the point across. I can see the boy’s shoulders slumping as he says, “Pansies.” Kudos. Glad you’ve joined our merry band of Friday Fictioneers..

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you for the feedback. Glad you enjoyed it (in a sad but good way).

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  4. Archon's Den Avatar

    I have often wondered just when the word sissy, came to mean homosexual. You described the bigotry sadly, but well. 🙂

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  5. neilmacdon Avatar

    Yup! That has a beginning, a middle and an end, with a twist in it. A whole story in 100 words

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.

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  6. oldentimes Avatar

    Sad, and so true. Well done.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thanks!

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  7. The Voice Avatar

    Well told story. Cruelty mixed with a touch of cynical humor. Nicely done.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you!

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  8. FabricatingFiction Avatar

    Really hard hitting (no pun intended).

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  9. rgayer55 Avatar

    Someone always gets labeled in the pecking order of life. Extremely well written.

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  10. Sandra Avatar

    Nicely done. With savagery and humour.

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  11. patriciaruthsusan Avatar

    Good story, Thom. It’s sad so much bullying goes on these days. My daughter wasn’t bullied but my son was until he gained weight and muscle in the sixth grade at around 12 years old. The bullying wasn’t quite as bad as with your character. Well done. —- Suzanne

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Sorry to hear that about your son Suzanne. Bullying in any form is horrible and can stay with a person for a long time. More should be done to prevent it. It’s sad for everyone involved really – even the bully as it often highlights a lack of decent upbringing, a desperate need to compensate for low self-esteem and an incredibly narrow view of the world. On that depressing note, thank you for taking the time to read my story! I am glad you liked it.

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  12. draliman Avatar

    The old classic “head down the toilet”. Nasty business, bullying.
    I can imagine that last line delivered either with a certain amount of bile, with a cynical smile on his face or even with a small smile of acceptance of self.

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  13. gahlearner Avatar
    gahlearner

    This is so sad, and so well written. No need to describe it, I think we can all guess at the kid’s feelings when he says ‘pansies’. And Dad has no idea…

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  14. lingeringvisions by Dawn Avatar

    Welcome to FF. Sorry I missed your debut. this story will make me come back next week.
    Powerful stuff here with some dark humor thrown in for good measure.

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    1. Thom Carswell Avatar
      Thom Carswell

      Thank you!

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